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A feature western
Burning Water

When a mining company burns his ranch and kills his wife, a reformed outlaw must choose between honoring her memory by staying the man she loved — or becoming the killer she feared.
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The story
Act one
Tom Burroughs — outlaw turned rancher — has built a life with his wife Claire and daughter Alice. When Marcus Blackwood's Empire Mining chokes the valley's water and burns them out, Claire dies in the fire.
Act two
Tom straps on the gun belt he buried years ago. He moves through Empire's men — but with each kill, Alice pulls further away. The daughter he's fighting for is watching him become the man Claire feared.
Act three
Tom faces Blackwood — and then the gallows. His final act isn't violence. It's choosing the kind of man Alice will remember. He dies so she can walk forward.
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Theme
Central question
"Can a man truly change — or does violence always reclaim what it made?"
Emotional core
A love story told in its aftermath. Claire is gone — but she drives every choice Tom makes, and ultimately the choice he refuses to make.
The ending
Tom goes to the gallows. Alice walks away holding Honey. Years later she names her son Tom — not because she understood the man he became, but because she never stopped trying to.
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Visual language
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The horned toad
The film's first image — and Tom's throughline. A creature that survives by going perfectly still, blending into the dirt, becoming invisible. When that fails and it's finally cornered, it shoots blood from its own eyes — a startling, costly defense that buys just enough time to escape.
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White picket fence
Built with Claire's dream. Standing perfectly intact when everything else burns. The same fence appears at an Empire man's house — hope, loss, and complicity tracked in a single recurring image.
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Honey
A carved wooden bear Tom made for Alice. She gives it back to him at the jail bars. He carries it to the gallows. It's all that remains of what he built.
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The characters
People worth fighting for.
People worth fearing.
An ensemble built from the ground up — each character a distinct moral weight in Tom's story.
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Tom Burroughs
Protagonist · Reformed outlaw
A train robber who put down his gun for Claire — and built something real: a ranch, a family, a reputation as a man who keeps his word. When Empire Mining takes all of it, Tom faces the question his entire adult life has been circling: was the change genuine, or just waiting for a reason to end?
He's not a hero seeking justice. He's a man trying to honor a promise to a woman who can no longer hold him to it. The gun belt goes back on. Alice watches. And the distance between them becomes the film's true wound.
"That was a long time ago."— Tom, when Claire asks if he'll go back to violence
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Claire Burroughs
Tom's wife · The ranch · The reason
Claire ran her family's ranch alone after her father died and her brothers rode off chasing easy money. She is self-sufficient, clear-eyed, and unsentimental — a woman who nursed a shot-up stranger back to health, chose him knowing exactly who he was and what he'd been, and married him anyway. She didn't marry a saint. She married a man who knew the value of peace because he'd had enough of the other.
She dies in the fire she ran back into to save Tom. Her absence is the film's engine. Every choice Tom makes after is a negotiation with her memory — and with the promise he made as she died in his arms.
"I didn't marry a saint, Tom. I married a man who knew the value of peace because he'd had enough of the other."
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Alice Burroughs
Tom's daughter · The moral compass
Six years old. Practical, watchful, and already more perceptive than most adults around her. She carries Honey — a small wooden bear her father carved — through every scene that follows Claire's death. When she's joyful, the bear is clutched to her chest. When she's frightened, it's just held. When she gives it back to Tom at the jail bars, it breaks something the violence never did.
Alice is the film's moral register. She doesn't judge Tom with words — she judges him with her body. When she turns her face away from his hand, the audience feels it. Her final voiceover, years later, is the film's grace note: she named her son Tom. Not because she understood the man he became. Because she never stopped trying to.
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Marcus Blackwood
Antagonist · Empire Mining
Welsh-born. Worked a coal seam at six. Built Empire Mining from nothing — every building in Prescott, every mine, pulled from the ground with his own hands. His joints don't bend right anymore. He sees the valley not as someone's home but as the next thing he'll build. He is not cruel for pleasure. He is indifferent, which is worse.
What makes Blackwood dangerous is that he understands Tom. He respects what Tom is fighting for — because he once fought for the same thing. When he rides out gut-shot to face Tom personally, it isn't pride. It's the only kind of ending a man like him can accept. He and Tom are the same creature, cornered.
"Burroughs understands that. He's fighting me because I took something he built. Same as I would."
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The Martin brothers
Wade Martin
Claire's brother · Tom's oldest ally
Late twenties, burly, steady. He rode with Tom before either of them knew better, and he's the one who brought Tom to Claire's door bleeding out from a wound he took during a train robbery. He's watched Tom become something good and he believes in it — even when Tom stops believing in himself. When Tom straps the gun belt back on, Wade rides with him without being asked. He dies beside his brother in the Prescott street, and his last words are about Alice.
Jack Martin
Claire's younger brother · The heart of it
Nineteen, wiry, quick with a grin. The youngest of the three Martin siblings — the one who fell off the rope swing and broke his arm, the one who spurred off to fetch the preacher when Tom proposed. He never lost the boyish energy that Claire and Wade grew out of. His death in the Prescott ambush lands harder than almost anything else in the script — not because it's dramatic, but because it's quiet. He looks at Tom across the street. His eyes close. That's all.
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Empire's instruments
Dutch Wagner
Hired gun · The man who struck the match
Scarred face, cold eyes, plays solitaire alone in a canyon saloon. He burned the Burroughs ranch for money — poured kerosene while a family slept — and when Tom finds him and forces his face toward a fire, Dutch has three words: "Just a job." He has a daughter. That fact doesn't save him. It just makes Jack's decision more deliberate.
Nathan Dyer
Blackwood's bookkeeper · The man who gave the order
Thirties, careful, keeps meticulous ledgers. He didn't light the match — he just moved numbers and signed off on the order. On his desk sits a child's drawing: "PAPA" in unsteady letters. Tom places it where Dyer can see it before he acts. Dyer represents the quiet machinery of organized violence — the men who never get their hands dirty but make everything possible.
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The Whitakers
Cole Whitaker
Pastor · Alice's guardian
Forties, pastor's collar, rides with the posse that arrests Tom but steps forward to take Alice before the marshal can make a worse decision. He gives Tom his word before God that Alice will be safe — and he keeps it. He is the film's quiet counterweight to Blackwood: proof that a man can also be shaped by loss toward something other than violence. His daughter Emma died of fever three years prior.
Sarah Whitaker
Cole's wife · Alice's family now
Thirties, quiet strength. She sits with Alice every night until she falls asleep. She sews Alice a new dress — simple, clean, well-made. She says almost nothing in the jail scene, but when she kneels and says "She'll have a home. A family," it carries the weight of everything Tom is about to lose. Sarah and Cole don't replace what Alice had. They become what she needs next.
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Comparables
True Grit
Coen Bros., 2010
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Unforgiven
Eastwood, 1992
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The Proposition
Hillcoat, 2005
— Comparisons drawn by Script Reader Pro analyst Michael Kalesniko —
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ISA Emerging Writers — Winner
Burning Water won the ISA Emerging Writers competition with a financial prize.
Script Reader Pro — Recommend
Analyst Michael Kalesniko: one of ~6 Recommends in ~600 scripts reviewed. Comps: True Grit, Unforgiven.
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13 Steps — #1 Western Short
Burning Water originated from 13 Steps, a short western that ranked #1 on The Red List. Held the top ranking for two years. Award winner in 20+ festivals. Burning Water is the feature expansion of that proven world.
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Authentic voice
Retired Fire Chief · Search-and-rescue pilot · Set Medic/EMT · Dolphin language researcher · College instructor. Writes from life.
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Burning Water

124 pages · Period western · Feature screenplay
Loren Davis
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loren@pensandhoses.com